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Bones Drabble: Seeing Red
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Written for [info]amilyn for a drabble meme.  Click the link if you'd like to leave a prompt.

Title: Seeing Red (Since Joss Whedon's birthday was yesterday. ;) )
Fandom: Bones
Characters: Brennan
Rating: PG or K
Word Count: 100
Timeline: Set between The Wannabe in the Weeds and The Pain in the Heart.
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Prompt: Brennan and fear.

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Seeing Red

Brennan sees red.

Carmine, scarlet, crimson, and ruby pour from spider-cracked windows, splatter across rows of Angela’s pristine stretched canvases, paint the strong mouth that traversed the territory of hers only once -- because of a prodigal father's holiday wish and an eccentric woman's whimsy -- but arrested her breath so many times she ceased keeping count ten thousand inhalations ago.

Dawn's light marches her to wakefulness -- and the crushing knowledge that her stomach (her gut, he would have said) -- telegraphs eons before her conscious mind catches up.

Seconds, minutes, twenty lifetimes later, she kneels and retches into the toilet's mandalic waters.

 


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Aw, poor Brennan. This is excellently written.

Great use of the different colours. I loved the the phrase *traversed the territory of hers* as well. Gives me an image that it was almost unwanted, and then the contrast of how it has been thought of so many times since. Powerful and evocative.

I had to look up Mandalic! Wonderful!

Thanks! So pleased you enjoyed this. :)

Thank you! Gorgeous use of language. I love the preoccupation with tiny details and the scatteredness of her thinking that's evident.

Potent view of Brennan's struggle.

Absolutely beautiful imagery here, loved all the different words for red, and your word choice is amazing! I really liked the phrase because of a prodigal father's holiday wish and an eccentric woman's whimsy

my heart....

oh, oh, oh, Temperance...

That is the most articulate I can be, having shared such brutal intimacy with her.




Many thanks for your kind comments.

LOcely. This is the scene and the emotion we should have seen.

You know? I try not to think about those scenes. This just makes me wish that the strike never happened and we got a whole season.

It really is too bad we got a truncated season.

This is exactly what was missing. Loved it.

Thanks very much for reading and commenting. I'm glad this missing scene worked for you. :)

Beautiful imagery. Thank you for sharing this.

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on this. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

I love this from start to finish... but this was truly fab:

the crushing knowledge that her stomach (her gut, he would have said) -- telegraphs eons before her conscious mind catches up

:)

Wow. This is more abstract than your usual. Really love this.

Thanks. :) Glad this worked for you. The "abstraction" seemed appropriate because she was dreaming. In general, I don't think this style of writing works that well for longer pieces. (I'm majorly generalizing here. *g*)

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