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Bones fic: Come Undone (1/?)
B&W B/B - lerdo
Title: Come Undone (1/?)
Characters: Brennan, Booth
Story Rating: R
Spoilers: Through season 2, to be on the safe side.
Notes: Where does Booth go on a night when his job feels like too much? Story set in season 3, but no spoilers for that season.
Warning: This story is rated R because of some adult themes, mild profanity, and some potentially difficult emotional content.

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Excellent! I love it and I can't wait to read more. I especially love your description of the characters.

Thanks, Flo. So glad you enjoyed the descriptions. I will be back with more, though it most probably won't be this week, as I'm in the midst of packing for a move and also want to update another story first.

Aw, how cute! I really loved the story, it was so well-written, it sent shivers down my spine! I loved that you used Booth's former addiction to game, and him turning to his Bones for comfort...

It's the first time I read a fanfic on this site, and I don't regret trying! I'll send the link to my friends, and I hope you'll have ideas for another chapter(s).

Just a little comment: I really don't think that Brennan knows how Booth found the earing.

I'm thrilled you enjoyed the story and plan to mention it to your friends. I'm flattered. Thank you! :) Poor Booth -- e certainly has demons -- just like everyone else. He surprised Brennan by coming to her, but I think she wants to be helpful to him if she can.

There's a lot of EXCELLENT fic here at LJ; have fun reading it.

As for whether or not Brennan knows how Booth found the earring, you raise a great point. There definitely isn't a scene on the show where Booth tells Brennan where he found the earring and explains the ramifications. However, I believe that she figured it out once he gave her back the earring at the end of the episode. I thin she's smart enough to remember their earlier exchange and make the connection:

BRENNAN: Look at it objectively. Graham Legiere was killed between 11:00 p.m. Tuesday and 3:00 a.m. Wednesday. Not only do I not have an alibi, I...I can't even explain to myself where I was. It could've been me.

BOOTH: (chuckles) No, it couldn't.

BRENNAN: Yes. Wha...how do you know?

BOOTH: I just know, okay? I'd bet my professional career on it. I already did.


BOOTH: Nothing.

BRENNAN: What did you do?

BOOTH: Bones! Stop. This is the last time and place that you want to be rational, okay? Let's just be wildly emotional and assume that you didn't psychotically murder a coworker who invited you over for dinner.

But thank you for sharing your perspective. It's certainly valid, and if I change my mind, I will change the corresponding sentence in Come Undone.

I will add at least one more part to this fic. It probably won't be up this week because I'm about to move and also because I need to update another story first, but I promise I'll post more as soon as I can. Thanks for the encouragement.

Good!! It was really nice :)
I hope you'll write more soon!! :D

Thanks. :) Glad you liked it.

I will be writing more once I'm done packing and moving.

nicely done. I like it. I hate to throw this out there or anything, i have a bones community called the_bone_yard and I'm in the process of revamping and such... but it'd be nice to see you post your stuff there :)

Thank you. I'm happy you liked it. And I don't mind you pimping your community. :) I'll check it out soon.

This was SO good! You did an amazing job illustrating how conflicted Booth's emotions are! I feel so bad for him. I'm looking forward to the answer to Brennan's question. "Of all the places you could have gone tonight, why did you come here?"

Please update soon!

Thanks so much. I'm pleased you liked it so much. Don't you just want to hug Booth? ;)

As for Brennan's question, she does have a knack for going right for the jugular. Makes her a fun character.

I promise I'll update as soon as I can. I've got another story I need to update first, and I'm moving this Saturday, so I've got packing weighing on me right now. But I'll get to this one soon.

This is so amazing, I really like it so far, you must continue, I love your writing, it flows and twirls into this beautiful piece of work not very many fanfiction writers can achieve. Do continue, this is quite amazing.

I love your writing, it flows and twirls into this beautiful piece of work

*blushes* What a beautiful compliment. Thank you. I'm honored you liked Come Undone so much.

I'll update as soon as I'm done packing and moving. Thank you again for the praise and encouragement. You've made me smile.

Excellent and so moving.
You are able to show a side of Booth that isn't really explored on the show, yet he and Brennan are still very much in character.

I'm looking forward to reading more.

Thank you. You know, I wish they would explore the troubled, vulnerable side of Booth more on the show. They've touched on it a couple times, but they could definitely go further. Who knows? Maybe they'll go there this season. If not, that's a void fic might be able to fill.

I'm relieved you thought Brennan and Booth were both in character. I do my best, but one never knows whether other readers/writers will agree with your vision of a character. :)

I'll be back with an update once I've finished packing and moving. Enjoy the Bones premiere tomorrow!

Thanks again.

You know there has to be more of this, right? Lots and lots and LOTS MORE! Okay, I'm like 5. But that was pretty amazingly awesome and I, personally, need more. Pleeease? Any new chapters exist right this second? Cos I would kill...

LOL Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed Come Undone. :) Unfortunately, no new chapters exist right now, but I do intend to continue. I moved a few days ago and am also recovering from what's called a missed miscarriage, so I am still trying to get my bearings. I just don't much feel like writing angst right this second, given my current real life circumstances. :/

But I promise I'll be back with an update just as soon as I can. Thanks again for your interest.

This is actually the first Bones fic I've ever read and I must say that it's startlingly similar to a scenario I've been thinking about, but written much better than I ever could. Can't wait to see more.

Thank you! I appreciate your taking the time to read and comment, especially given that this is the first Bones fic you've ever read. Thanks for taking a chance on this story.

If you enjoy reading fic, I'd encourage you to seek out some more in the Bones fandom. There are some wonderful stories -- both on LJ and at fanfiction.net. Some of what you find won't be to your taste, but there's a lot that's definitely worth reading. And who knows, you might be inspired to write some Bones fic yourself. :) The world just can't have too many writers.

As for the specific scenario in Come Undone, I think I wrote it because that's what I wanted to read. On the show, they've just barely touched upon Booth's struggles; I'm hopeful they'll reveal more. I suspect there are a lot of shadows underneath Booth's charming veneer. As broad and strong as those shoulders are, even they've got to feel weak sometimes.

Thanks again. I'll update as soon as I can.

Oh wow... that's a pretty powerful chapter! I really like how Bones had her own internal self-examination before deciding to "cross the line". Please say there's more to come! I can't wait! Really, really well-done story. :)

Hi there. Thanks so much!

I really like how Bones had her own internal self-examination before deciding to "cross the line".

Brennan's got feelings, just like everyone else, but she's generally a pretty cerebral character. All depends on the particular situation, though.

Please say there's more to come!

*grin* There's more to come. I've got some other updates to do first, but there will be more of this.

Just wanted to say, I hope you continue this. It can't be easy to write, but it's very moving and I think we'd all like to read more.

Thanks. I'm pleased you thought this was moving and would like to read more. I do plan to continue.

It can't be easy to write

You're perceptive; I feel a bit intimidated every time I look at it. I really want to update it, but I've shied away from touching it because I so desperately don't want to mess it up. Writerly insecurities and all that. :)

But I promise I will update it. I just need a little time to wrap my head around it.

Thanks for your interest, and for taking the time to comment. I appreciate hearing your thoughts.

I can't recall if you're one of the Bones authors I've asked about this before, but if you don't know anything about Asperger syndrome, you're doing a really good job writing that aspect of Brennan's character blindly! From the fear of intimate contact (unlike Zack's version, which is the version I have, too) to the never knowing whether or not there's a double meaning and being terribly confused by intense emotions and wanting to flee the scene where they happen, even though they don't go away instantly upon fleeing. Oh, and her getting angry because Booth didn't react the way she expected to what she felt was the best course of action in the situation and insisting he stay to see it through? CLASSIC! GREAT JOB!

Brennan has Asperger's syndrome? How did I miss that? Do you remember which episode that was mentioned in? I'd like to go re-watch it.

I'm happy that you thought Brennan was in character in this. Thank you for reading and commenting. :)

I can definitely see Booth doing something like this after a horrible case. Well done.

My heart beats faster with their's. The emotion you convey transcends the page.
Awesome start to what I'm sure is going to be an amazing piece of art!!


This is the kind of story I really appreciate. Not a lot of plot (nothing wrong with plot mind you) but a whole lot of charged atmosphere that makes both of them face their reality. Very good.