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Ficlet: Light (1/1)
B/B Touch - lerdo
Title:  Light (1/1)
  Ok, so I finally managed to write something that fits within the 4300 character limit for the Porn Battle.  (I hate the word "porn," but that's my own personal hang-up.)

This ficlet feels strange to me, so it may feel strange to you, too.   I know what I was trying to do, but it may not have worked for this short a piece.
Timeframe:  Sometime in the future.  Booth and Brennan are romantically involved. 
Characters: Booth, Brennan
Rating:   M or NC-17 for a little darkness and a little sex.
Summary:  "Light does the darkness most fear."
Disclaimer:  Bones and its characters belong to FOX, not me. This story is purely meant to entertain. No copyright infringement is intended.

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it was unnerving in a way, but i liked it. what i liked was that the sex read as comfort more than smut, and when someone can do that, it's a serious talent.

and i know what you mean about the word porn.

by the way: what is with you and ALWAYS listening to a song i like?! this time it's by frou frou! my goodness. <33

Frou Frou rocks my socks. *g*

I think Brennan definitely intended the sex to comfort and be a sign of affection.

As always, thanks for taking the time to read and comment. I do so appreciate it.

It could be different because it's now Brennan comforting Booth and going for action instead of words to do so. Apart from that, I can't find anything strange about it. Excellent work.

Thanks, Foxy. Maybe that's it; I don't know. And maybe there isn't anything strange or different about it at all. *shrugs* Regardless, I'm happy you liked it. :)

Unsettling, perhaps. I'm going with divergent, as it's not the usual B/B encounter. Of course, that's what makes me enjoy it even more. There's nothing fluid about their relationship, and I think you've portrayed that wonderfully. Of course, you always do.

Thank you so much. :) They are rather interesting together.

It is a bit.. different, for you. But I think maybe it's the feelings behind Booth's words that are affecting us, not the actual story. You tend to convey the emotions behind the words very well and with this story its like they're right beneath the surface. Nevertheless, I did like it(and it was hot. hee.). I'd still call it a success ;)

So, just to clarify, you felt that the emotions in this were more understated than they usually are in my writing?

Thanks for reading and feeding, Avery. :)

This is really good. I didn't find it strange at all. It seems completely natural that things could progress this way between the two of them at some point in the future.

Thank you, Gina. I'm glad this felt like a plausible snapshot of the future.

Actually, I've read most of your fics and your characterization is always spot on. Which is a lot more than I can say for the vast majority of the Bones fics I've seen.

It didn't seem weird to me. I loved it.

Because he belongs to her; he knows that now, and with that knowledge comes acceptance.
This just makes me smile.

I think unsettling is the right word, and I also agree that it's because you do so well portraying Booth's emotion. He's unsettled, and accepts Bone's overture, but it's only a distraction, a few minutes of reprieve before he has to/maybe needs to be alone in the dark again. I think most of your B/B so far has come to some sort of minor conclusion or peacefulness and this doesn't, it lets that unsettled feeling lie. And, imo, that totally works.

I took a few days to really think about how I felt about this fic and why I agree that it does feel a little "strange". What I've come up with is this:

Booth and Brennan are out of their normal "characters", but within the scope of their whole characters. It's like how any one of us could be "off" for any number of reasons on any particular day. But because they're in character (two characters having off days) it comes across as extremely personal. I felt a little guilty peering into the very private scene. The smut part was a record for them, not for us.

I enjoyed it, don't get me wrong. The tone was consistent, although dark. I thought it was a really interesting place to take them. But I think that explains some of the strangeness for me.